This is a really good rough draft, as it is, it reads like a well written outline of a better story. A lot of the cripple stuff was a little weird and off, but I haven't read a book yet that wasn't.
Still, a sweet slash story. I liked the idea of the whole town knows what's up so we might as well just hook up approach Gill had. I also really liked the unromantic details Lynne thought to use in her conflicts.
I don't think I would even get gas in a place called Cattle Valley, but it sounds romantic to me now.